英语小短文三首

My Birthday Party

My birthday is on October .12th I have a birthday party.I invite my friend to party.

FirstWe light the candlesthey sing the birthday song.I make a wish.ThenI blow out the candleswe cut the cake.We sing and dance.We have a good time.

Winter

I like winter.Winter is the fouth season of the year.Winter begins around December.The weather is cold and snowy.Winter is the white season.We play the snow.We are very happy.

I like winter very much!

My Friend\'s Daily Life

My friend is Susie.Shi gets up at 6:00 in the morning.He goes to schlool at 7:00 in the morning.He has classes from 8:00 to 11:40.He has lunch at 12:00.He goes home at 4:00 in the afternoon.He does his homework in the evening.He goes to bed at 9:00 in the eveing.

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